Saturday, September 20, 2014

Murder, Thought We Wed?

Thought you would be the last
Left a strange, unusual past
Guess you never meant to be true
Since you bid me, utter adieu


I was only looking for you
I was just a game for muse
sorry, sorry, sorry, sorry, sorry,
for offending you, in the lorry


unrequited pain, real year of terror
shall you return, I look in the mirror
why you are unable to be a friend
know you erred, everything did blend


forgiven you are, even when you said
horrendous things, thought we had wed
more or less, so alone I am instead
murder, or stress, a heart is stone dead






(In response to Karin Boye & A Bad Girl) shared with
Real Toads hosted by Bjorn after reading his post.
Also shared with Poets United @ Poets Pantry after reading
a post by Mary, who hosted today!



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17 comments:

  1. humbirdSeptember 20, 2014 at 7:11 PM

    Real tragedy...well expressed

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  2. Vandana SharmaSeptember 21, 2014 at 12:57 AM

    Very deep seated sad emotions expressed here but so wonderfully expressed that they tug at the heart.

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  3. brudbergSeptember 21, 2014 at 12:59 AM

    Oh yes.. that was a great response.. You took it further and deeper.

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  4. ZQSeptember 21, 2014 at 6:47 AM

    Well done!
    ZQ

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  5. ScarletSeptember 21, 2014 at 8:00 AM

    How sad and lonely ~ This is a lovely response to Mary's post too ~

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  6. kaykualaSeptember 21, 2014 at 8:26 AM

    "unrequited pain and unrequited love" It is more or less similar. Must it happen! It is most trying! Great lines!

    Hank

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  7. Sumana RoySeptember 21, 2014 at 8:46 AM

    loneliness well captivated ...

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  8. MarySeptember 21, 2014 at 10:09 AM

    Being alone is better than being in a painful relationship.

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  9. NatašekSeptember 21, 2014 at 11:52 AM

    a heart is stone dead.. strong emotions

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  10. Sherry Blue SkySeptember 21, 2014 at 12:03 PM

    I'm with Mary. The person in this poem is better off without the person who causes such pain. Great response to the prompt, as well as Mary's poem.

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  11. scotthastiepoetSeptember 21, 2014 at 2:57 PM

    Hiya, Your story convinces - you've been there, I can tell... With Best Wishes Scott

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  12. HannahSeptember 21, 2014 at 3:32 PM

    Such a grim reality and feeling of solitary and loss in this...expressed well.

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  13. GabriellaSeptember 21, 2014 at 6:18 PM

    A fine response to Karyn Boye's poem. I like how you conveyed hurt and an utter feeling of loneliness. Although in the end it is probably better not to be in such a relationship, the pain can feel unbearable once we realize we have been used.

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  14. Stacy M.S.September 21, 2014 at 6:30 PM

    i think you did excellent with capturing the dark, moody feel of boyle!

    stacy lynn mar
    http://warningthestars.blogspot.com/

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  15. humbirdSeptember 22, 2014 at 4:51 AM

    Forgiving- is divine deed, passionate response. :) Ths for visiting.

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  16. AnonymousSeptember 22, 2014 at 7:18 PM

    There is a strong sense of pain here that is very poignant. K.

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  17. Gen Giggles September 23, 2014 at 7:46 PM

    The pain is palpable.

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